Great work
I gotta give you props for your attempt to bring thought into your rap. You might want to amp up your vocal level a bit more and possibly add some overdubs in the future. Doing this might make your message more evident to the listener. Overall: good track, keep at it man
Thanks for the feedback. The overdubs are actually in there, but I probably have them turned down too low. Since I mastered it myself, I'll have to do a bit more work on it. Still doing my best to learn and improve.
Atta boy.
Nice work man. Im loving the positve message you're trying to spread. You're ability to make a song that flows nicely from start to finish is amazing; I like the last bit of the track where you threw in that sound clip. The "God has a plan" sample, needs some refining ( it kind of breaks the motion of your track). You're delivery with this sort of sadness works fairly well.
Dude, I am proud of you. You are making worthy music with heart. Keep at it!
=D thanks man, I love 2 make ppl proud, there's a first part to this too, I made it a while ago if u wanna c it same title jus not second lesson. I agree with the sample but it's to bring a nightmare quality like a post apacolyptic feeling to bring people to think about it more=) anyway im glad u liked it as much as i did,
Keep it pimpin'
BN out
Ready.....FIGHT!
You damn insane B.C. mother fucker! This shit is psycho crazy! I cant wait to hear Casey Jone's response... I'll let you know who is the winner once I've heard both... but he's got quite a feat ahead of him. Impressive work man. Have a nice day!
thanks for the review man
Meh...
Gasmasq's part seems to have some emotion in it; the listener can kinda of feel his desperation. Now, Mr. Wyze... You're part is alright, but there are some issues with the flow and tone. At times the flow feels inconsistent and rushed (rhythm man!). To jump on this track after Gasmasq, you kinda gotta follow his mood; I didnt get the same feeling from your take, you need some depression in your voice. Sell that pain to the listener!
I consider myself an artist. Some would call me an Art teacher. You should continue to make music because you are continually improving your skills with music. I wish my learning curb was as steep as yours has been lately. Like damn man, you're making impressive tracks, and on a regular basis. You got passion to make music, so keep making it!
Word to the Wyze: The best art comes from the heart. Inspiration is your only drug. and fuck ms. KADIEEx in the ass till she bleeds!
lmao. FUCK HER WITH A DRILL!!!
Ya, I had tried to get some emotion, but unfortunately (or fortunately) I just was feeling too happy that day. was hard to get in that sad mood I was in when I wrote this.
Thanks for the review man
Hellz ya
Great drop on this beat. Your flow works near perfect in the beat. The beat is amazing, props to War-Spawn on that. The chowderhead line is iffy, it got my attention when I heard it, as if it was a bit chowdery... lol, Nice track man, keep it up
haha worrdd i totally know what you mean, i put a lot of effort into the first two verses, came up with the first 4 bars of the 3rd and ran into a major road block, got through another 4 bars and then created the last 4 bars and needed something to fill haha
Dopin Broken N
Great track right here. Monk is on fire and BN is dope. The overdubs were perfectly placed and what not. The only sore part for the last line "outside my lines": Your rapping had a aggressive tone, but then the last lines where you talk it, it doesnt really flow well... Other then that this track is wicked, keep at it!
true, didnt rly think of that, i recorded them w.o the beat there
The legend is back...haha
I like it man. You're lyrical ability is developing greatly, you got wicked rhyme scheme with this one. You're flow is getting there! I like the FX you added into this one, thats how it should be used, f*ckin rights man. Nice work on the historical reference in the chorus.
I better not see you coming out with diss tracks everyday again, take ya time, and hit em hard with each track. Fuck the jabs when you can go for the uppercuts. Peace bro
lmao word man, the historical reference r some o ma nicknames(lol some ppl call me spaniard or cortez) and no worries man, shit'll b good=D
Keep it pimpin'
BN out
HAHA!
This is funny shit man. Pedicure... haha!
The events that followed are as follows:
Ben actually attacks me
i jab him with the microphone
i am forced under the computer desk
i finally manage to get out
he laughs at me
It was pretty awesome =]
hmm...
The beat is too quick and snappy
The piano and strings are done well but they dont seem to mesh well with the together yet. With a little tweaking here and there this beat could be decent. The sounds are all right, they just don't fit the puzzle yet, if you know what I mean...? Keep at it.
Thanks bro, I'll try to go with what you said.
Not bad...
Alright, I dont give much props to artists who use filters/edits to adjust their voice to make music, anyone with the right computer program could make music. That being said, this track is interesting, the high pitch alteration sounds fuckin wicked :D Please don't get accustomed to FX'n your voice with artificial bullshit, thats fake. The beat is insane, Im diggin the chanting, nice work to SilverGorilla. Nice experimentation dude, keep it up (except rely on natural skill, not computing ability, haha) peace
I agree sir, I don't like effects, other than maybe chorus's or small parts to make a point. But the beat sounded much nicer n the girl sounded younger with high pitch=)
anyway
Keep it pimpin'
BN out
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