RAP and RAPPERS, not HIP HOP and MC's
It's different sounding, thats for sure (both your style and the beat). I like the lyrical content in this. I dont agree that there hasnt been a good record since Rapper's Delight (sure it's a classic); I'd suggest Atmosphere, Louis Logic, Ill Bill, Wax and EOM, Atom tha Immortal, Asheru, Cunninlyricists, Classified, Swollen Members, Murs or Jungle Brothers (I'm sure you're heard most of these).
The flow is a bit awkward, but I know what you're talking about, the slower flowing tracks are usaully a lot more difficult to deliver right. You gotta put a lot more expression in each line to get it too sound just right. I think ya did decnt job though.
Nice work man, keep at it.