All's Well mmmmm this is that smooth jazzy syzzzzurp cascading down bluesy cool wave of chill vibes. Really like the vocal sample cut-up bridge. News sound of twenty20 sounding dope Piche!
mmmmm this is that smooth jazzy syzzzzurp cascading down bluesy cool wave of chill vibes. Really like the vocal sample cut-up bridge. News sound of twenty20 sounding dope Piche!
Gosh damn that is Christmasy spirity!!
fuck this is dope as all hell!
Beautiful!
Very rich and audible!
Damn very nice!!
Samus is spot on! Nice range!
Oh man sorry for replying so late, thanks a lot! I appreciate it a bunch!~
I took a few takes for samus, I really wanted to get that whole "detached and tired" feeling for her. It seemed like it would fit~
Beat production is dope, no surprise there. Lyrics; on point, loving the introspective narrative, with some f-u attitude. Rhymes is good. I would recommend looking at a couple bars here and there to help build more schemes and patterns into the verse.At points it reads as if there are forced consecutive rhymes in some lines. For example:
My mom’s got a man who doesn't want to understand her skill;
Earth's at a standstill, everyone sits and shits while man shoots and kills;
Some take pills, others poke themselves with quills;
My writings take understanding will and power;
After a clean shower I flower while I glower at your steep inclinations;
Don't want an invitation to your divine inspiration;
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Mom's got a man, (shit!) doesn't understand her skill
She's at a stand-still. So we sit while the man shoots to kill
Take some pills, or poke yourself with the quill
I write to understand this, it takes power and will
As I shower my flower, I see your steep inclinations
I'm not wow'd by the tower, you can keep the invitation
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Anyway, thats my 2 cents and a loonie. Solid concept, can't wait to hear when Avatar Caine is ready to drop!
Thanks for the pointers Mick!
I'll see how your edit flows out loud and contemplate whether to change it or not. Likely will, but it remains to be seen.
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